Thanks for joining us again for a Shadorma poetry challenge
Special thanks to my dear friend Annie Welch who has had some terrible things going on this week with her health yet she took the time to put this post together.
We want you to enjoy sharing your Shadorma; we appreciate your patience as the guest host usually takes time to visit each submission. The One Stop crew will make the effort to give you feedback on your Shadorma.
Just a reminder regarding the form.
Shadorma is a 6-line poem (sestet) of Spanish descent with no set rhyme scheme. The shadorma is a syllabic poem with the following structure: 3/5/3/3/7/5.
- Write line one with three syllables
- Write line two with five syllables
- Write line three with three syllables
- Write line four with three syllables
- Write line five with seven syllables
- Write line six with five syllables
So here’e the Poetry Form challenge for today~ transform one or both of the following poems into shadorma form. In other words shorten one of these poems to fit the Shadorma or write a Shadorma of your own.
UNTITLED
Annie (written as a rough draft in 2006)
You know that
one last slow drag
that reminds you
that it’s already tomorrow
and far too late to forget last night?
That one moment
when everything is still
and the zero is in
and it’s in on you.
You know that moment
when you inhale and aim
finding the trigger
in the stillness
before you breathe again?
That single second
where time ticks with a laugh
creating barriers
that don’t have to last.
You know that moment
that contains
a thousand rough drafts
and an amoral rendition?
That glimpse of paradise
through eyes that paralyze
clear with the whole breathe
that your conscience may never rest.
You know that thought
or misinterpretation
That leads only to acid burns
ending in termination?
It’s that wrenching
realization that even
at the point of impact
you were already broken
That one frozen moment
when you realize
that the past is a scam
and the future
Is a parlor trick.
You that one moment
when you look to your father
and see your daughter has
already made her own plan?
It could be that one,
last,
slow
drag
that changes everything.
This one is by Dustus 
Sit in the empty coffee shop
No longer know a soul
Thomas Wolfe is right I guess
This author can’t go home
Cloudburst angled upon the pane
Highway 9 drenched in rain
So true it may now seem cliché
Springsteen and his “Glory Days”
Tank on empty, broke of money
Await my chance with haste and fury
At least this writing prompts relief
But I’ve returned to lack of sleep
Feel Born to Run, still want to scream
Hiding from the inner me
While I am in The Garden State
Can’t tell my future lies in wait
Please refer to last week if you need more reference. After you have written your Shadorma on your blog, link in here at One Stop Poetry, and
enjoy reading what others have written.
Photography thanks to Creative Commons and the photographers:
K Kojlowska:http://www.flickr.com/photos/kojotomoto/2598342665
Joshua Rappenekerhttp://www.flickr.com/photos/joshua/32213
Thanks so much Annie for introducing us to the little explored Shadorma. I’m enjoying it and enjoyed the prompt from poetry.
Hope all of you enjoy as well.
Moondustwriter
For today I am linking Sanctuary which is a poem made of Shadorma stanzas. It is a commentary on the terrible gang violence going on today in Mexico where innocent lives are being lost every day because of gang wars over the drug trade to the US.
This form lends quite a haunting atmosphere to “ordinary” words! I enjoyed the experience!
Can you please help me delete my first submission, I saw Shadorma and I immediately attached the poem without considering the picture prompt. The second submission is the final and correct one. Thanks.
Interpret and rewrite someone elses work ??? Eeeeeek !!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sorry Dustus.
You did a wonderful job. I left comment on your site. Thank you. (dustus)
I love this form! There’s so much potential in it just like haiku and senryu. Less syllables, means you can hint at things! Thanks Annie and thanks One stop!
I wrote two Shadorma: Dustus’ rewrite and my own, after a particularly lovely day in Amherst with all three of my children and a beloved friend (I had never met until yesterday after years of “knowing” her online.)
that is so cool julie….
Couldn’t help feeling inspired by Annie’s post, as well as the many excellent responses. Had to try one. What a great form! Thanks again, Annie
Pretty interesting and challenging form. Great job done here with it.
I created a page on my blog dedicated just to One Shot poetry. Practicing the Shadorma form inspired by Dustus’s poem
I like this “new to me” form of Shadorma…. thank you for sharing.
i just love the shadorma form! i think it may have been Annie who introduced me to it a while ago, and i’ve written quite a few, i love how they flow. thanks for this!
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Okay I just created my very first Shadorma and posted it on my blog titled Predators, this was a very interesting form and I have written probably 120+ haiku’s before but enjoy the extra challenge of doing 3 syllable lines mixed in.
very fun…thanks for allowing us to deconstruct a poem..most generous. Wishing Annie the best…feel better, and thank you!
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thank you for all the kind wishes! and the wonderful writing!
Just posted my shadorma inspired by the poem Adam Dustus so kindly shared..
write on y’all!
better late than never? i hope so. {smile}
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